Exercises for Eliminating Wordiness

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Directions:
Revise these sentences to state their meaning in fewer words. Avoid passive voice, needless repetition, and wordy phrases and clauses. The first sentence has been done as an example.

1. There are many farmers in the area who are planning to attend the meeting which is scheduled for next Friday.

1. Many area farmers plan to attend next Friday's meeting.

2. It is expected that the new schedule will be announced by the bus company within the next few days.

 

3. There are many ways in which a student who is interested in meeting foreign students may come to know one.

 

4. It is very unusual to find someone who has never told a deliberate lie on purpose.

 

5. Trouble is caused when people disobey rules that have been established for the safety of all.

 

6. A campus rally was attended by more than a thousand students. Five students were arrested by campus police for disorderly conduct, while several others are charged by campus administrators with organizing a public meeting without being issued a permit to do so.

 

7. In the not too distant future, college freshmen must all become aware of the fact that there is a need for them to make contact with an academic adviser concerning the matter of a major.

 

8. Some people believe in capital punishment, while other people are against it; there are many opinions on this subject.

 

Directions: Combine each sentence group into one concise sentence.

1. The cliff dropped to reefs seventy-five feet below. The reefs below the steep cliff were barely visible through the fog.

 

2. Their car is gassed up. It is ready for the long drive. The drive will take all night.

 

3. Sometimes Stan went running with Blanche. She was a good athlete. She was on the track team at school.

 

4. Taylor brought some candy back from Europe. It wasn't shaped like American candy. The candy tasted kind of strange to him.

 

5. Government leaders like to mention the creation of new jobs. They claim that these new jobs indicate a strong economy. They don't mention that low-wage jobs without benefits and security have replaced many good jobs.